Hi reader
Five weeks ago i had dream about a cartoon cat attacking me. The cats name was Jerry. Jerry had friends. Jerry was attacking me. Jerry was extending his head out and was trying to bite my head. Jerry's friends names is cartoon dog part 2 , cartoon dog part 1 and cartoon mouse , cartoon mouse killer , cartoon cat mad. Then i saw a nice friend of my his name is long horse fighting them all but it was not like that at all story of cartoon cat his name was trevor henderson he is a mad man he made cartoon cat , made cartoon dog part 2 an cartoon dog part 1/ Jerry ugly brother then he made a cartoon cat mad. Dark siren head i need help then he came then long horse die dark siren head was mad and had 15000 hp then start to kill them all. Part 2 is coming soon ...
Good afternoon Ryan.
ReplyDeleteYou have used some great describing words and they have made your story more powerful.
I like the use of made up names.It shows that you are putting a lot of thought into what is going to happen and how.
Just remember that when we use people's names they need to have a capital letter.
You also might want to re-read your work to make sure that you have full stops in the right place.
I am looking forward to part 3......